If I lived my life without you
I would’ve never grown
Because if you hadn’t been there
I would have taken my own
Life without you
Wouldn’t exist
I was on the verge of dying
When you saved me with a kiss
It didn’t mean much to you
But it made all the difference
For if you had not came that day
My life would end in violence
Life without you
Wouldn’t be life
Because life with you
Made me drop the knife
It’s not bad :) The only thing that stood out to me was the usage of the word “life” three times in a row in the last paragraph, and the last line containing the word “knife” makes for a very monotonous and sort of incongruent rhyme scheme especially compared to the other lines which sound much better to me as a whole.
The quality in the first two paragraphs is really nice but from then on it sort of feels like a different poem and the “flow” is a bit lost.
But overall it’s not bad, you have potential.
The topic itself is very sweet, the idea of someone saving your life with their love is very sweet. Have a nice day/night <3
