Checkout

Humour

Checkout the checkout Frantic man with furrowed brow An overfilled basket Too late for a trolly now. Single man With toilet roll And a copy of The Sun for hyperbole Couple with wine And a fancy cheesecake To friends to dine New friends: can’t be late Bread and cheese For the lady who looks tired Loyalty card is ready Points have expired And me, 6 items or about Carry on here Or surly self check out

Comments 1

Kail Cleo

a year ago

I love the second and third stanzas especially. I also love how you approached the prompt, it’s creative and not like anything else I read. It’s really entertaining and the pace helps me enjoy reading it, it makes me want more of your tight descriptions of people at the check out. It makes me realize sometimes I look at people in the checkout and make up little stories about the people based on what they check out- which sounds silly but is just a fun creative way to make the store more interesting during grocery shopping. So I definitely related to this poem too. I liked it a lot. The last sentence felt a little cliché perhaps, it wasn’t as strong as the rest, almost like an afterthought. I do this sometimes too, I find endings to be difficult with poems especially. Im not sure how I would end it myself to be honest, but it’s something I’d consider while editing. Looking forward to more of your writing.

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