POEM STARTER
Submitted by Annie
Write a poem about the feeling of youth.
Which elements will you explore to portray this feeling to your readers?
The Feeling of Youth
There was an old man from East Coring,
Who could barely get up in the morning,
Though very unfit,
His sledgehammer wit,
Made your time spent with him far from boring.
I must say I soundly agree,
When you say youth is no guarantee,
Though they often look bold,
Many youngsters are old,
I dare say, even older than me.
You mention the feeling of youth,
Well now, let me tell you the truth,
When I tie my own shoe,
I turn purple, then blue,
Then fall over, head first, on my tooth.
Few things left I can do by myself,
Many years since I last reached that shelf,
Bones reduced to a patchwork,
My eyes count on guesswork,
My mind seldom sure of itself.
Feeling young, a sensation so tender,
Is something I cannot remember,
As far as I know,
I was always this slow,
Annoyed, fed up, vexed, quick to temper.
Old man, you sound irky and bitter,
Your reasoning no more than a whitter,
Seniority’s strong,
Plus it doesn’t last long,
Live well, leave the bickering to Twitter.
That is so wonderful. I love that each verse is a stand alone limerick and yet there is an ongoing theme and plot development.
Being young is okay but don’t give up on being old.
The last verse is wonderful, espadrilles it’s the youth that spend a lot of time bickering on Twitter over seemingly pointless things. A well constructed, thoughtful and well put together Limerick poem.
IT REALLY WORKS EPIC WIN!
Thank you so much, Sally, for this message and super detailed feedback! 🙏 I’m glad you liked it! You’ve given me such a massive boost! :)