WRITING OBSTACLE
Write a descriptive paragraph about a predator.
Think about the meanings of the word predator - it could be an animal, a person, a completely fictional being, or something more metaphorical.
Mother
She is my clay
Free for me to mold to whatever I wish.
I deserve to.
I made her.
I am her creator.
And I am the person she’s afraid to become.
Her tears are my opportunity.
Her yawns are open doors of manipulation.
Let me mold you daughter.
Let me make you into who I wanted to be.
Let me make you perfect.
You say I don’t know you.
But I’m the one who you are the most like.
Do you assume I don’t know myself?
Come here child.
Come into the arms of cynical embrace.
Let me feast on your insecurities.
Crunching the doubts and fears
Between my teeth.
Tasteful.
Satisfying.
Delightful.
I love this. It is dark and makes you think.
The only thing was the last line of the first stanza where you use “she’s” in “And I am the person she’s afraid to become.” In my head, personally, it flows a bit easier with the rest of the poem if you use “she is” instead.
Very creative! Keep up the good work!
