STORY STARTER
Submitted by Arnold Carroway
Write a scene that takes place in mid air.
It could be from anyone, or anything's, perspective.
STORY STARTER
Submitted by Arnold Carroway
Write a scene that takes place in mid air.
It could be from anyone, or anything's, perspective.
Hello! I'm don't consider myselff perfect or else, but I read your note on asking for advice so here it goes. I like the dynamic between the characters, but you could enhance the description on what they're doing. I mean, they're flying and fighting mid-air? and he's an eagle or some mystic creature? some description on what they look like, especially the princess. Is she human? The way you describe snow in the kingdom is awesome, but to feel the scene better — which I'd say I love the banter and their interactions — it could be nice to describe the air, the view, the rush of air as they're flying, their secret love. And that's it, hope you like my advice!