If only you was someone for me, and I believed every word that came out your mouth,if only what you said Was true,then we could’ve had been together. If only you gave me a chance to prove to you that we was meant to be,if only you wasn’t a doush.... if only you was the one in my dreams and everything came to reality ...if only,if only...
Ooh I liked this one. Again some more advice.
1. formatting again especially with poetry its really important to separate your lines.
2. Maybe and this is just my opinion so feel free to ignore this but maybe try to make the poem flow a little better.
3. My last thing again grammar and spelling is really important.
Now for things that I did like.
I really liked how you used repetitive speech to get your point across and it did help the flow of the poem.
Again great job!
