POEM STARTER
Write a poem about a messy room.
Whether literal or symbolic, think about what the messy room can tell us.
Clothes hung in the closet
And nothing on the floor
That’s how it’s supposed to be
But oh, not anymore
Now all is in the closet
And the clothes are on the floor
A hurricane has happened
Or possibly a war
I really should be cleaning
I can’t even see my bed
But I opened up my phone
And now I’m writing this instead
Love it!
To be clear, I loved the simplicity (and reality!) of this poem. 🙌🏼👏🏼⭐️
The last line, of the first stanza, seemed to run on a little longer rhythmically than the others.
With respect (and just to experiment), I suggest that for a slight change of rhythm, add:
Clothes hung in the closet (6 beats)
Nothing on the floor (5 beats)
That’s how it’s supposed to be (7 beats)
But no, not anymore (6 beats)
Now all is in the closet (7 beats)
And the clothes are on the floor (7 beats)
A hurricane has happened (7)
Or possibly a war (6 beats)
The third stanza I would totally leave.
What do you think? 🤔—If this suggestion doesn’t ‘sit well’ with you, then please totally ignore me—knowing that, regardless of our differing interpretations, I love the gist of your poem 😁
Nice work! 🙌🏼👏🏼
