When We Collide

Two ships passing in the night

The passion that sets souls alight

Who said what when liquid tongues

And labored lungs sung delight

My waters your muse

You glide so enthused

Riding my waves

Plundering the depths of caves

Away we float together

Attempting to rock the boat forever

Alone at sea

Just you and me

In this salacious moment

The sweetest taboo torment

Drifting away, you pass

Leaving memories made to last

Comments 2

The metaphor of two ships passing in the night, driven by passion, is pretty cool. It creates a vivid image of a fleeting connection.

The wordplay with “liquid tongues” and “labored lungs” is nice, and it adds a sense of intensity to the poem.

I like the idea of riding waves together, attempting to rock the boat forever, but then the realization that it's a fleeting moment. That part has a touch of bittersweetness…

Overall, it's a unique take on the boat metaphor, and it definitely leaves an impression. Keep on writing! 🚢