LA Sunsets
I can’t see the ground
Only rare, low-hanging clouds
I live in the sky
A single palm tree
Hanging sideways, clouds my view
But I can’t complain
Orange, yellow, blue
Endless summers in LA
Always sunset hues
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I can’t see the ground
Only rare, low-hanging clouds
I live in the sky
A single palm tree
Hanging sideways, clouds my view
But I can’t complain
Orange, yellow, blue
Endless summers in LA
Always sunset hues
I really like this read; You’re writing is really fun to imagine! I would recommend using some more commas just to have some extra structure.
for instance the line “Orange yellow blue” could be written as “Orange, yellow, blue.”
it is important to remember this is optional like everything in writing, so do what sounds best to you!
good luck on your writing journey!