From fur vests to button down shirts
To kitten heels and denim skirts
The purses and sneakers that litter the floor
Leading to a slightly bulging door
Hangers laying on the cotton tees
But no need to clean
Just close the door when there is company
She always says to me
Tight jeans,purple beanies,and grandma’s hideous presents
Heavy bangles,sleeves in tangles,and frilly summer dresses
Thousands of stuff
But according to her
It’ll never be enough
Good poem! I liked the rhythm of the first paragraph, but when I reached the line “But no need to clean” the rhythm was kind of broken for me. Still, liked the third stanza a lot. However, the line “thousands of more stuff” sounded a bit awkward. Other than that, I loved the rhyme scheme, and the imagery was really well done. Clever ending too. Great job overall!! 👏👏
This is quite interesting and i love how you conducted your poem.
I liked the flow of the beginning very much. There were some things that invoked the sense of touch in addition to sight. I think it could have been possible to describe it in a way to invoke hearing. I think the list could have been organized with a more artful flow. Overall I liked it and the list flow thing was the only real critique I had