WRITING OBSTACLE

Write a descriptive paragraph about the contents of your wardrobe, encapsulating as many of the senses as possible.

Try to focus on making this an interesting and descriptive narrative, rather than what the clothes are for.

My Daughter’s Closet

Poetry

From fur vests to button down shirts To kitten heels and denim skirts The purses and sneakers that litter the floor Leading to a slightly bulging door Hangers laying on the cotton tees But no need to clean Just close the door when there is company She always says to me Tight jeans,purple beanies,and grandma’s hideous presents Heavy bangles,sleeves in tangles,and frilly summer dresses Thousands of stuff But according to her It’ll never be enough

Comments 6

EnglishGirl112

4 years ago

Good poem! I liked the rhythm of the first paragraph, but when I reached the line “But no need to clean” the rhythm was kind of broken for me. Still, liked the third stanza a lot. However, the line “thousands of more stuff” sounded a bit awkward. Other than that, I loved the rhyme scheme, and the imagery was really well done. Clever ending too. Great job overall!! 👏👏

Toni Cathey

4 years ago

This is quite interesting and i love how you conducted your poem.

Liam Murphy

4 years ago

I liked the flow of the beginning very much. There were some things that invoked the sense of touch in addition to sight. I think it could have been possible to describe it in a way to invoke hearing. I think the list could have been organized with a more artful flow. Overall I liked it and the list flow thing was the only real critique I had

Sylvie

I want to become better at my writing since I’m not so good at it.Please give feedback so I can improve!😁😁😁😁😁😁