brother.
run, run, run is all i ever do
“wait, wait, wait let me come too.”
“no, no, no” i tell him from a far.
but now that i think about it, maybe i’m his star.
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run, run, run is all i ever do
“wait, wait, wait let me come too.”
“no, no, no” i tell him from a far.
but now that i think about it, maybe i’m his star.
I really love how your poem is short and simple. I also really like your use of repetition as a stylistic choice. I think you could improve your poem by focusing a bit more on your punctuation and make it more intentional. Adding a comma between the words “it” and “maybe” would highlight the idea that the speaker is thinking by creating a pause for them to think. Try to think about small things because they can make a huge difference in poetry!
