STORY STARTER
Your character's spaceship crashes on an unknown planet. They discover a world identical to our own, but with one major difference...
STORY STARTER
Your character's spaceship crashes on an unknown planet. They discover a world identical to our own, but with one major difference...
Very engaging! Some feedback:
The crushed leg seems to be an important part of your story. One thing I am trying to focus on more my self is making bodily pain more visceral. To invoke more feeling in my readers:
"Pain throbs trough my nerve system. My leg crushed under the weight of the desk and computers, the femur had snapped with a loud crack when it had come crashing down."
And then sprinkle stuff like that throughout the story, bringing attention back to the pain and seriousness of the situation.