STORY STARTER
“It had been a long time coming, but now I felt I could truly call myself the slayer of monsters.”
Write a story that concludes with this line.
STORY STARTER
“It had been a long time coming, but now I felt I could truly call myself the slayer of monsters.”
Write a story that concludes with this line.
This piece is really strong, and it is good. I would really recommend using the classic rule “show don’t tell” (Sometimes it is good to tell though). Maybe instead of saying, “I was always the odd child, always wanting to make sure others followed the pure and the natural path.” you could put in one of the characters memories of helping another child be pure.
Another thing is to watch you comma placement. You do a good job in most parts, but the line, “No one understood, my feelings on the matter so I decided one day, I would slay the monster and today is that day.” (be careful of run on sentences) would be, “No one understood my feelings on the matter, so I decided one day I would slay the monster… And, today was that day.” Revisiting comma rules is always good 👍
Anyways, good luck on your writing journey!!