I try to follow my own path
But I guess I can’t
Every time I try
Something pulls me back
I don’t know what it is
But I don’t know what to do
Maybe I don’t try to hold back
Maybe I should try what the world
Has in store for me
Maybe I should wait
For something called fate
To call me where I belong
very cutesy, very demure, very mindful ✨✨✨
Setting: Though I can not entirely tell where it is set, it doesn’t seem to be jumping from place to place or time to time. The form is well written so setting would not be seen as an issue.
Beginning and ending: It is a short poem so there is not much between beginning and ending. What is there is good. It starts off strong. And ends even stronger
General Feedback: Thank you for sharing this beautiful piece of art with us. Never stop writing. Never give up.
