I love this poem, it is so heartfelt! It really makes you notice humanâs nature to miss moments and feel nostalgic; You did a really good job emphasizing that :D
I would recommend you add commas and punctuation to give your poems a flow and something the reader can use for structure. For example, the sentence, âThe seasons before while usually quietâ is hard to read, but it could be written as, âThe seasons before, while usually quiet,â. (Also I would recommend not cutting a sentence in half to make two lines because, in the readers mind, it reads as one, but sometimes it doesnât. So if you want, ignore that advice entirely lol. Just remember to reread stuff to make sure it flows together.)
Again, I would recommend brushing up on comma rules because, and you donât do this a lot, there are some parts where their could be commas (In poetry/any writing, there arenât any ârealâ rules, just stuff that helps the reader read your writing. So, you donât really have to follow any of this advice; Itâs just nit pick lol). An example of where you could put a comma would be, âAs the leaves begin to witherâ and you would put a comma at the end, â⌠to wither,â
Overall, nice writing, and keep up the good work :>