POEM STARTER

Write a poem or short scene about the changing of seasons.

Whether you're going for a literal or metaphorical meaning, consider the different structures of writing which could suit your message.

Seasons Change

As the leaves begin to wither.

And the skies start to cloud.

The seasons before while usually quiet,

Seem to become much more loud.

I start to wish for the sun to come out and play.

I beg for my sun kissed cheeks to reappear, and forever stay.

I remember and mourn every sunburnt summer day.

finally, when summer comes back around.

I will miss the brisk breeze of the winters.

all the filling holiday dinners.

As each season passes, i miss one as much as the next.

Leaving me feeling empty ,and even more perplexed.

Comments 4

Gwendine Gikshty

2 years ago

I like the line about the sky beginning to cloud. You use the word unconventionally, but you get the point across in an interesting way. Well done overall!

💚 Froggy 💚

2 years ago

I love this poem, it is so heartfelt! It really makes you notice human’s nature to miss moments and feel nostalgic; You did a really good job emphasizing that :D

I would recommend you add commas and punctuation to give your poems a flow and something the reader can use for structure. For example, the sentence, “The seasons before while usually quiet” is hard to read, but it could be written as, “The seasons before, while usually quiet,”. (Also I would recommend not cutting a sentence in half to make two lines because, in the readers mind, it reads as one, but sometimes it doesn’t. So if you want, ignore that advice entirely lol. Just remember to reread stuff to make sure it flows together.)

Again, I would recommend brushing up on comma rules because, and you don’t do this a lot, there are some parts where their could be commas (In poetry/any writing, there aren’t any ‘real’ rules, just stuff that helps the reader read your writing. So, you don’t really have to follow any of this advice; It’s just nit pick lol). An example of where you could put a comma would be, “As the leaves begin to wither” and you would put a comma at the end, “… to wither,”

Overall, nice writing, and keep up the good work :>

Renier

2 years ago

I remember and mourn every sunburnt summer day… that’s my favorite line.

Seasons Change

Britney Sawulski