WRITING OBSTACLE

Write a short story inspired by your favourite piece of art, whether this is a sculpture, a poem, a song, a painting etc...

Try to use creative techniques to incorporate the artistic theme into your story.

Doll House

Poetry

TW: drugs

(Edited)

Crash

The bat swings

Knocking down several vases

Rage fueled by dope

Screams

Echoing throughout the house

Bouncing off the walls

Covered in photos filled with

Artificial happiness

Cries of pain and sorrow

Hoping for something better

To feel loved

But that seems impossible

Moans

Saturated in betrayal

Mother doesn’t know even if she did

She wouldn’t care

She’s busy trying to create

A picture perfect family

Nobody knows

How toxic we are

Nobody knows

How broken we are

Cause we’re just to good at playing

Doll house

Comments 9

Carter

a year ago

Not gonna lie, this kinda reminds me of “Dollhouse” by Melanie Martinez

Kathy

a year ago

Nice, this is really good

Little cc, If you want the poem to be more readable, try to collect lines more

Such as saying

“cries of pain and sorrow,

Hoping for something better”

And not

“Cries

Of pain and sorrow”

It’ll make the poem easier to read, and then allows you to actually include these single word lines even more powerfully

I think the example I used was very good use of your writing, it was just on the screen while I was writing lol

This is really good, I’ll look forward to seeing more from you ^^

pinkberries23

a year ago

“d-o-l-l-h-o-u-s-e i see things that nobody else sees”

such a good poem, keep it up 👍🏻 ♥️

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