A Critique: Shadow

The poem:


β€˜Pushes’


On the ground,

Staring at the ceiling.

Hearing no sound,

But my fears wheeling.


My body a ball,

Wilted in fear.

I have taken the fall,

In the end we are here.


Teeth ground flat,

Breathing is tight.

After our chat,

Don’t want a fight.


Given up the ghost,

My heart now hush.

Let’s make the most,

My soul now mush.


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**A well meant mess.**

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**Shadow’s work has always been divisive and this piece is no different, a mixture of internal dialogue and turmoil sometimes makes for good work. Not here though as it comes as amateurish and bereft of inspiration.**

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**_Silvia Groves

(Part time writer and amateur food blogger)


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Love You R


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Oh look 800 pieces…πŸ₯²

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