Hey stranger, I’m just a high school student who wants nothing more than to publish a book. I'm past the planning stages and have started writing! :] I could use some help with a little feedback!!
Hey stranger, I’m just a high school student who wants nothing more than to publish a book. I'm past the planning stages and have started writing! :] I could use some help with a little feedback!!
Walton walked down the carpet with a glowing smile. He hopped up and down as he held his dad’s hand, he looked at every camera and every person around him. His eyes lit up as he tugged his father’s hand before pointing
“Look daddy it’s Jennifer Aniston! I haven’t seen her in aaages.”
His dad looked before he gently pushed Walton’s hand down.
“Don’t point buddy, we can go see her after, right now ...
“These ones are dahlias, they’re my favourite but I always have a hard time finding them outside of shops.”
She smiled and held out the flower
The flower which she would protect with her life
The flower which she would die for
Her flower which makes her happier than anyone ever could
Soft white delegate petals
Each petal different than the last
Each petal glowing in the sun
Glowing but not as muc...
Slight recap from where we left off
…I watched him as he picked back up the oar but as he made the first stroke a black figure snatched him up just feet away. I jumped to grab him, his dog barking, him screaming. My sides hurt making me collapse on the seat he was just sitting in. I looked above me panicked as the dog continued barking. The sound echoing in my head, driving me insane. I watched a...
“I know where all the missing socks go.”
“Ok then where do they go?”
Agent Marsh leaned forward in his chair and rested his arms on the table.
“Well it wouldn’t be a mystery now then would it?”
Marsh just looked at Terry who sat with a smirk on his face as his handcuffed hands sat intertwined on the table.
“You win.”
Terry’s smirk slowly dropped as he processed what the agent had said.
“What?”
“...
My arms ached as I forced my oars through the current. I could hear the flapping of wings in the distance. I looked behind me and saw huge crow like creatures tearing apart the town, my home.
I tried to get out as fast as I could, luckily I still had my boat from when I went fishing with my son. He was still in the village, he was gone when I woke up. I hope he’s safe.
I looked back in front of ...
“Come on!”
Jake pulled my arm and jumped up and down before he let go and ran over to the edge of the cliff which was partly walled off.
“Woah! Daniel look at the water from here!”
I stopped walking and took a couple steps back.
“Uhh I think I’ll stay back here.”
“What? Come on man it’s awesome!”
He looked back at me with bright eyes and a smile which spread across his whole face.
“There’s a ro...
What have you done
What have you become
I loved you
I trusted you
I poured my heart and soul into caring for you
You said you’d love me till we’re old
Said you’d warm me when I’m cold
Said you’d be there for me then and always
It was all a lie
All you do is lie
After all it’s how you survive
Starting fires
Burning bridges
Burning lives
Melting hearts before you break them
You said I was your worl...
CRACK.
The gunshot echoed through the air and rattled through my head, everyone froze as I held my eyes shut. I could hear the bullet make contact with someone followed by giggles from everyone else. Laughter surrounded me as I looked at my friends with a smile, the boy in front of me laying on the floor holding his leg.
“That was a close one huh Holly! Aren’t you glad I was in front of you?”
“O...
(WARNING: Somewhat graphic descriptions of gore)
A cloud of dust formed in front of me as a swarm of turquoise butterflies came flying out of it. I put my arm in front of my nose and mouth as the ash and dust spread out. It settled rather quickly as it was raining, a skinny man wearing all black emerged and stepped forward
I looked at him with a stern look and nodded to address him.
“Boss.”
The s...
“Floris, they’re ready for you.”
I nodded and took a deep breath, my lines running circles in my head as I walked out to the stage.
10
I stepped up to the microphone and gave a smile to the judges.
“Hello, I am Floris Jansen and I am auditioning for Prior Walters.”
“Alright, we’re ready when you are.”
9
I took a deep breath and when I went to speak nothing came out. My thoughts had stopped r...