🏆 Writing Competition LIVE! -💰 $100prize

Writing Prompt

WRITING OBSTACLE

Use the following words to set the scene for a thriller story:

Cold,

Arid,

Lifeless

Try to set the scene; describe the location, the scenery, and the atmosphere. You don't have to get into any action of the plot.

Writings

The floorboards creak outside the broom closet’s door, a girl cowers behind a rolling bucket, the stench of chemicals burning her nose. “Alyssa,” she hears him coo softly, his Nikes squeaking on the school’s polished floors. “I know you’re here. I just know…” She hears the scrape of his pocketknife on the painted cement blocks as he turns the corner, only inches from where she hides. She squeezes her eyes shut and holds her breath as he approaches. “Come out, come out wherever you are,” he says softly, chuckling at his own joke. The door to the closet pops open, the silhouette of his figure propped against the frame. “Alyssa, come here…” The knife clicks against the metal trim like a clock, ticking down her minutes of life. He slides forward, pushes back the bucket, yanks her by the hair, throwing her into the school hallway. “Jermaine, please,” she wails as he pulls her and slams her on the floor, a knee at her throat. “Did you go with him?” He says in an arid tone, eyes nearly empty. “No, nooo…” “I saw the pictures, Alyssa.” “They were fake, fake!” She wails. “Do you know what I could do to you?” “Please Jermaine, please…” “Do you know?” He yells, knife shaking in his right fist as his knee smashes her windpipe, cutting off her airways. She doesn’t say anything as he pulls away, rubbing his stubbly chin, leaving her laying on the hallway floor. He spins around suddenly, his cold blue eyes boring into her as she lays perfectly still against the polished white marble. “You’re so small… I should crush you like the roach you are,” he whispers, grasping her hair and pulling her to her feet. “Or I could open you an like a can of beans and devour every. inch. of. you.” He pushes the blade against her jugular vein, feeling the throb of her racing pulse against his forefinger. “One push and you could die, Alyssa. How does it feel to be scared? How does it feel to know you’re going to lose something, babe?” “Please, don’t-“ The blade cuts across, a tingling sensation at first, until the blood rushes down like fire, burning it’s way down her shirt, like a tall glass of alcohol. “God, I love you,” he whispers, kneeling down beside her as the life bleeds from her bones. Strangely, Alyssa doesn’t cry. She simply holds a hand to her throat, choking sounds gurgling from her raw windpipe and she struggles to breathe. She’s drowning in her own blood. “You look so pretty,” he whispers, brushing back her hair as she slumps, her lifeless eyes gazing at something she can no longer see.
She's freezing, her clothes are wet. The cold leaves its mark on her as she shivers. She looks around the pool she just swam out of. Empty. The usually crowded pool is devoid of people. The room itself has an eerie quality to it and everything feels unreal. Her head moves upward and it hurts. It feels so heavy, her eyes feel so drowsy. And her body...it aches. There's also a stuffy feeling brewing in her head which makes her ears feel plugged. She looks at the row of windows which showcase the starless night sky. And the moon looks at her as if it knows all of her secrets. She finds herself wishing it would tell them to her because all of her mind is a blur. It's dark but the lights in the pool are shining. It's her only guide out of here. She doesn't remember how she got here. She doesn't remember the past few days at all. Her nose starts to bleed like it does whenever the air is too dry but then she realizes that's not the only part of her bleeding. Lifting her hand to cover her nose, she notices marks on her arm that look like zig-zag slashes. Was she in a fight? She takes off her wet shirt, using it to wrap her arm. Once she's sure it's secure, she walks. Her feet are bare. Heavy like her head. Her wet clothes leave a soggy trail wherever she moves. Finally, she reaches an exit of the building and is in an alleyway. She hears someone coughing, a homeless man who she's spoken to before. His name is Morris and there was a time he was a train conductor. He lived in his glory days often but those days were so far gone. She wonders for a horrifying moment if her days were also gone. Isn't it funny how when things feel finite time feels numbered? She thinks about tomorrow but her minutes feel fleeting. Has she done anything impactful? Will anyone remember her laugh? These are the things she thinks of as she looks at Morris as if he’s a mirage. She pictures him as he once was. A fancy hat with his railroad company on it instead of the dirty beanie on his head. She imagines him wearing suspenders like conductors of old instead of a shirt full of holes. But then reality comes into play and she sees a broken man sitting on a cardboard box. He's half-asleep using another flattened box to cover himself with. She keeps meaning to buy him a blanket but she always forgets. “Do you--” she starts but becomes wobbly. The homeless man jolts out of his half-asleep state, bolting towards her and helping to keep her steady. “You alright there Ms. Blake?” he asks, his eyebrows drawing together. She tries to answer but her mind is an arid wasteland where no thoughts could flourish. Finally, she finds something to say. “Yeah, Morris, I’m--” She never finishes her sentence. Her eyes close. Her body drops and she becomes lifeless in Morris’s arms.
She woke up from her nightmare, abruptly, gasping for air, before squinted her eyes a few times, allowing them to adjust to the stark darkness of the room. With her index finger and middle finger on her neck, she felt the quick rhythm of her heart begin to slow its pace, and she became more calm. Suddenly aware of the fact that in her hastened awakening, she may have disrupted her sleeping husband, she glanced at the clock on her bedside table, revealing the hour to be midnight, exactly. Concerned about the time and how her hasty awakening may have disturbed her sleeping husband, she turned toward the man laying next to her, in bed, ready to adamantly apologize for any disruption she may have caused to his sleep. As she reached out with her left hand, feeling for her husband, however, she was startled, when what she felt, laying next to her, in bed, was not the warm body of the man she had fallen asleep next to, more times than she could count, but instead, an arid, cold, lifeless corpse. Still struggling to see, in the bleak darkness of the room, she squinted her eyes a few times, desperately willing them to adjust to the all encompassing blackness that surrounded her and the dead body, laying next to her in bed. Slowly, she began to be able to see and make out the shapes of the furniture, in the room that had once been a place of tranquility for she and her husband but was now an atmosphere overcast with gloom, as she saw the pool of blood on the white duvet that the two of them were sleeping under. Confused and horrified, she began to scream. “Really, Liz, I would much prefer you didn’t do that,” she heard a male voice state, calmly. “You know no one will be able to hear you. Your nearest neighbors live miles away.” The sound of his voice, a voice she had not heard in so very long but could identify, anywhere, sent shivers down her spine, and she looked in the direction it had come from. She blinked a few times, wiping away the large tears on her face, now making out the figure of the man sitting in the oversized leather chair in the corner of the room. “What have you done?” She asked him, unable to hide the trembling terror in her voice. “I’ve done what you’ve always known I would do,” he calmly replied, leaning back in the chair, making himself more comfortable. “I’ve done what you’ve always wanted me to do.”